Very good vocals
You have a very full matured voice and the song matches it nicely but I don't really like the piano keyboard, it seems to clash and take away from your voice and the lyrics. I think with better instrumentation this piece could really come alive.
You have to keep the effects changing, you can't just keep a repeating rythm and melody. Plus there needs to be more dynamic changing; crescendos and all that. But most of all make it build, make it pulse, make it LIVE! And there's to many techno songs, make some other genre.
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